New plot...What do you think?

Okay, I got rid of it... ^_^ And, new plot line will be something like this...:

Aria is going to participate in a thing to strengthen the thinning line between their dimension and Ours. Unfortunately, something goes wrong, and she gets thrown into our world, where she hits her head and looses consciousness, and her memory. She is found by some random people, and taken to the hospital where the bad guy, who is a guy in high standing, finds by the records that-

Hold on, I have to draw a Five Headed Hydra for my younger brother. Just, x_X. ;) I also did a dragon for him last night...

Anyway, Done, and I have to say, that Both of the pictures turned out better then I thought they would. XD ^__^ It's fun drawing them too...I like drawing. XD And writing. ^__~

Anyway, he finds by the records that someone that sounds like she has the attributes of her race, and as he had been looking for their kind a long time, then he goes to her hospital room, and it turns out she IS one, but she escapes, and he is after her, and...I'm not sure what beyond that. But the end result will be that she goes home...or maybe not. It depends on what I think up to happen! I don't know.... ^^0 There is also the thing that her parents don’t really see her as a real person, and she wants to make them see her for what she is, and all that...but yeah. So, think it's redeemable? ^^0 Tell me what you think if you have a second! I would be eternally grateful! XD Thanks! ^_^